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Sometimes I wonder: what am I?
I look at the stars and feel very small;
just a tiny consciousness.
But if I were as tall as a planet,
I would still be short in comparison to the universe.

I see a person twice my size
and I feel weak and fragile.
But if I were strong and powerful,
I would still not be invincible.

I see a painting by the hand of a genius,
and I feel inexperienced and ignorant.
But if I were the greatest artist alive,
it would not make me love what I do any more or less.

I see blood, running from the wound of another,
and I feel a chilling fear from deep within.
But if I walked this earth with bravery,
it would not make things less dangerous.

I see a baby, innocent and naive,
and I feel cynical and jaded.
But if I saw through untainted eyes all my life,
it would not make the world a better place.

I see a raindrop, tear of the sky,
and I feel ugly and unsightly.
But if I were as beautiful as rain,
it would not make me crystal clear inside.

There are children with cancer,
mothers who lose their babies,
people who are worse off than dead.

I wonder if I am just lucky or if the world was cruel.
But even if the world was kind or if I were dying, too,
there would still be suffering.

I weep all night, I get nightmares,
I lose myself thinking of such things.
But even if I could right every wrong,
if I could run faster
or jump higher
or be stronger,
it would not make me better or happier.

With what I have, I'll do what I like
and like what I do.
Life is good.
"Do what you like, and like what you do. Life is Good."

When I was a kid, I bought a hat with this stitched on the inside, and ever since then I guess you could call it my creed. :D

This is something I wrote ages ago and found again today. I dunno...I guess it turned out okay.

My teacher wrote "Very Powerful Piece" on the paper, but she was kind of...ditzy (nice, but ditzy). So I didn't know whether to trust her judgment or not. xD;;

[EDIT] ಠ_ಠ WHY is this thing on the front page? Obviously there is some horrible mistake here.

Oh...and thanks, I guess. [/EDIT]
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:iconthundertwinkies:
thundertwinkies Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
your teacher was right about this poem being a powerful piece! it's very deep and philosophical!
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Imnothereyouknow Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome done, dude! :)
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Roxi95 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
i can find myself in this... i like it, it's a powerful piece ;)
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jojojoanaa Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
That's really good. Deep. I like it.
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joshuaklewis Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
nice! :)
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angelicmist Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010
wonderfully written!!!! seriously loved!!!
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kaipolanialisha Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010
<3 i love this .....helped me out alot, thanks..
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ophelialife Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2010
I got goose bumps!!! Its awesome OUO
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Maestro-Kavi Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
It's quite good. You have a talent for writing.
It's always fun to find old writings and revisit them a bit.
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sammie819 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010  Student General Artist
Amazing. Describes me & my insecurities well. =) Two thumbs up.
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quarternote84 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2009
thing is, i'm a huge failure and well, i've been wanting to die. i don't need it yet but i want it. i wanted to die. now i don't. thank you.
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SarahTriceratops Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely Fabulous.
I wish I could write poetry as half as good as this.
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need-a-nickname-101 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2009
Wow. Amazingly written! So deep and powerful! Well done!!
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shioziz Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2009
nice =D
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be-who-you-are23 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2009
this was really good
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saykha Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2009  Student Writer
beautiful :heart: just beautiful

:+fav:
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Inked-Flowers Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2009
As ditzy as you teacher was she is most certainly right. It’s brilliant.
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thhecolorisblue Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2009
This is absolutely wonderful.
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:iconangelicarrow27:
AngelicArrow27 Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
absolutely beautiful. :)
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loverz116 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2009
i love it. very powerful and touching.
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toshisri Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2009
whoa...love it....
it has a depth and i felt strong feelings(or vibes) related to it...i dunno..
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nekobladen Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2009  Student Writer
This reminds me of how I felt a few months back. When I would think about my own death I was horrorable panic attacks. My creed would sound more like "Matter becomes nothing, so nothing matters". Or close to it if I wasn't so wishy washy. Nice poem.
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Yuri-pad Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2009
this is a great piece of writing. the way you express these concepts is very fresh and real
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KazeKageSama95 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
wow... that was really beautiful...
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fallenangel614 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
What you say is soo true.
In a way I already knew everything you said but seeing/reading it makes it soo much easier to comprehend or well I dont exactly know how to say what i feel but lets just say it was really insirational and awestrucking.
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RokxMcShadow Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Student General Artist
Completely True!

Very beautiful Ita ^^

I'm sure everyone must feel like that ^^ Good job in expressing it.
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Norac Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2009
General consensus, lovely poem!
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firefreak13 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2009
honestly, i think it would be safe to trust your teacher about this. It's really deep, even if you didn't mean for it to be.
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FlameTH517 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2009
This is very nice
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seanfhocal Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2009
I think like this sometimes... so i listen to disney songs. s'all good :)

I like the little story about the hat you had, its cute :D
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PoldeyLove Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2009
goosebumps all the way..
this is beautiful :love: sad yet inspireing.. it's just so true..
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GinNoYoru Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
You should trust your teacher, this is very powerful.
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oOayu-chanOo Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
...I've never felt more connected to someone that I don't know. Brilliant...
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PsychicInTraining Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
I agree with your ditzy teacher. :)
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TobiObito4ever Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... It's very pretty.
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crazygurl123 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
this is beautiful,
well written and very powerful.
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ItaLuv Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
:hug: Thankies~
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crazygurl123 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
anytime.
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BluuStar Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow this is really good!!
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ichigolove Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
this is really strong worded ....its really beautiful

it kinda explains the world ...how things cannot be controlled no matter how hard you try
and how you shouldnt just give up but try to make it a better place even though its for a small amount of time
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LadyXaviorLeilani Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
amen :nod:
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Angry-buddha-88 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
What is this madness? A poem on the front page? And what's more, a poem that isn't just bad prose cut into pieces and presented to look like poetry. Or a poem that's only eight words long.

Blasphemy.
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AchromaticMoth Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
I love this... I personally relate to it a lot, and its a bit depressing for me, but then the last line is like... oh- everything is alright. Okay.
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HanukoUchiha Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009  Student General Artist
wow, very deep. :nod:
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TanzDerSchatten Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
It's actually awsome. Doubt there is any word to describe your work perfectly.
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Parasols Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ditzy or not, I would definitely trust her judgment. This is lovely, and you make me want to write again (=
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Kyubi-Kitsune09 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
Beautiful.
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oromos99 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
very nice and well written congrats! :D
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Yuna-yurble Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
nice I like a piece which makes you think about different things
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Princess-Kirby Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009   Writer
my god, i can relate to this
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